Wednesday, April 9, 2008

Peer Editing

For Genia's comments!

4 comments:

Genia said...

Hiii!
I think the text is simple and informative, it explains the use and history well. I found a little mistake, but other than that it is grammatically correct and is easy to read. Formally, I thought that the text needs a little more hierarchy, like subheads or something. It might also help if you made the names of the shoes bold or italic, but that's up to you. You did a good job of finding information for your graphic and it looks like a good start!
-genia

alicia rosas said...

Thank you Genia! I saw the edits you made on my print out too, so I'll get those fixed.

And I'm definitely going on a labeling spree!

Sheila W said...

Sheila was here.

Genia said...

Genia read your comments. She approves.